Feed back guys and gals please

[yarmouth1]

Hi was wondering if you good people of APW would give me some feed back on my latest Role Play?

Here's the link for it.

apwprez.proboards.com/index.cgi?board=meltdownrp&action=display&thread=10210&page=1

Thanks guys and gals, Any feed back would be great.


Cheers Yarmouth.

[goodburn]

Hey there, I'm new here, so I'll give you some feedback if you give me some

Good roleplay, but the beginning with the camera guy to me seemed like if it was real, it would have been poorly directed. It was slow. I mean, you have a camera guy simply walking around, showing the surroundings. What the beginning really needed was perhaps a lot of quick cuts while being able to hear the two guys train together with him barking orders, and then finally focus on the two after finally showing everything.

[yarmouth1]

Ah right cheers mate, Seems like I got it all the wrong way round?

Thanks for the feed back, Give us a link to your Role play and will give you some feed back when I come back from shopping mate.