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Post by A.C. Smith on May 19, 2012 22:27:06 GMT -4
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Post by Johnny Rebel on May 19, 2012 22:29:07 GMT -4
You rang?
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Post by Metrodamus on May 19, 2012 22:46:54 GMT -4
I think both role plays were solid. I'm honestly struggling to come up with a lot to say because there wasn't a lot wrong with them. Some might point out there's minor writing errors but they don't detract from what you're saying. The only thing that I can think of is that it's more a promo as opposed to a role play. You've done well as a wrestler, you establish your character and then talk about your opponents which is good.
That being said I believe there's a limit there as to where you could be possibly go using that as it seems rather formulaic. What I'd like to see is you establish more of who AC Smith is, and that is likely to take him out of the realm of wrestling so to say. It's important that you make it so everything can tie back into it, but giving AC Smith a 'character' I think in the long run is going to give you a shot to really advance here in APW. I think a couple of really good people to read are A) Michael Callahan and B) Johnny Rebel. This isn't a knock on anyone else but I find they're two of the best people that in every role play develop their character, what's going on for them in APW, and also talk about their opponent. They're distinct however in that it should give you multiple basis to draw from and develop your own unique style. There may be a few bumps in the road but I think if you stick it through they'll be worth it.
I really hope this helps because as I said to Kyle (Noble) there's promise in A.C. Smith, it just needs to be realized.
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Post by sykes on May 20, 2012 6:28:44 GMT -4
I have to agree with everyone else. Like I said in the feedback I gave you for your first one rp. You've done a great job in getting the character off. You've done a great job in getting him hype and a great job in selling the hype.
I'm not quite sure what it is about this rp, but I personally feel this one was better than the first one. I'm not sure if I felt this one was more promo based or what. But this one really sold me and this was the rp that I truly believed knocked me out of the park when it came to the match.
I would say there isn't much you can do thus far that I see that you need to change in order to get success. Much like a lot of people have said. AC Smith is a character that is coming off strong and has a lot of promise to him. No doubt about it will you see some success from him. Keep up the good work dude.
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