DEBUT . || Feedback?

[Kevin Dahlia]

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This was/is my debut RP within APW. Grabbed me the win over Kiz & Dangerous. Before my next match comes up however, I was wondering if I could get some feedback to help me in the future.

Just need to know what was GOOD and what WASN'T so good.

Please & thanks?

[goodburn]

So, I open up the roleplay, first thing I think, "FUCK THAT'S TINY!"

So, after I open up microsoft word so I can actually read the roleplay, I find the behind that tiny text is some pretty solid substance. Although, I give this piece fo advice to everyone who has some flowing issues here and there, read out loud.

I might be the only one that thinks this, but I think it's odd to brag about how many words are in your roleplay lol. Also, does that stuff at the bottom factor into how many words are in your roleplay?

[Lord Raab]

It's most likely the layout. I mean my Stefan RP's have always got a graphic on it cos I find my RP's with Stefan's special.

[[ManiC]]

Brett, you're still a pretentious arsehole, though it is odd not to see page upon page of Character Development on your part. There was an occasional issue with the flow of the story, and occasionally you developed Stephen King Syndrome in over-describing and drawing out parts for too long, but overall a solid RP. Good to know you haven't gotten too far out of the swing of things (good to know, that is, until I'm booked against you, then you're a bastard for it).

Also; I believe it's mainly a layout thing. Brett's always added footnotes of which match the RP was for and how many words are used, just so people may keep track (and in a fed where there are word limits it may help to acknowledge by how much you are under said word limit).

[Kevin Dahlia]

Haha, I have an issue with describing things. I get caught up in the process, lol.

As for the word count, it is simply the fact that there is a word limit, and I wanted to make it clear where it stands. I always find it helps those reading, to know how much they are in for as well. And too answer the question, no I don't count those parts as part of the word limit, haha.

In terms of the size, I realize how small it is. I've always played at a smaller size, I find it typically makes the roleplay look neater. But, I hadn't realized how small it actually looked on this site due to my laptop (Linux, Ubuntu-GNOME) having an odd deficiency,where it is always zoomed. Lol.

But thanks for the positive feedback guys ^_^

Also, side note. I'm drunk right now. HA.