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Post by warrenpeace on May 30, 2012 11:27:21 GMT -4
Hey guys I was hoping I can get some feedback. I have been wanting to take the character in a new direction for a while. That revolution stuff was good, but reached its maximum potential. I had been floating around, but not really making any forward progress.
So I used my real life near death experience as a way to get the character rolling for asylum and may possibly turn face.
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Post by The Main Attraction on May 30, 2012 11:42:46 GMT -4
Nice build using the real crisis to change him from the better, and just a quick note using red as a color makes it hard for GM's to judge as they won't be able to read without highlighting...and trust i have first hand experiance from my Red Shield Mafia days.
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Post by warrenpeace on May 30, 2012 12:00:53 GMT -4
Thanks...
Yeah I usually only made the Warren name red not sure what possessed me to make the dialogue text red.
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Post by sykes on May 30, 2012 16:08:00 GMT -4
I took the time to read your rp in between working on mine and I have got to say that I like it. I too have often used a personal experience for one of my characters. I felt like it brings better writing material. It connects you as a person with the character. Gives it more creativity and originality. So kudos there.
I can certainly see this slowly turning the character from a heel to a face. Nothing wrong with that at all. I kind of view his near death experience as a bit of a wakeup call and it is making him see things in a whole new light. But at the same time you can still get this vibe that he is still a bit of a heel. Which is good because good face/heel turns or heel/face turns are normally done well when they take their time to build up.
Solid rp in general, the only thing that I could say that you need to work on is driving home the point that this thing that happened to him has truly made him open his eyes. You started to do that with this rp. It was kind of vague imo but you still have another rp to do if you choose to do it so you can sell that then. But aside from that nothing that could be done to change it imo. It'll be a good match between us, good luck to you sir.
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Post by warrenpeace on May 30, 2012 23:10:06 GMT -4
Thanks Sykes. I was waiting to see your rp before I decided to do another. I often hate to sandbag people with 2 rps when it seems close when we both have the one. There are a lot of possibilities for the character now and I am open to write just about all of them, hence the vagueness. Cause basically I am just not quite sure what is next. Looking forward to seeing yours as well.
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