Feedback On My Anti-APW RP

[Calvin Ingram]

Secession From APW:War Begins Interested in you guys opinion on Caine dumping The "Legion" in favor of an assistant and his mysterious counterpart Matthew Turner. He'll touch base more on the end of "Legion" in my second roleplay. In this one I set up the possibility of Caine shedding the facepaint which he will at the 6/3 Asylum. As he's tired of the President Jeff and the people trying to kill what he loves Professional Wrestling. So him not being apart of APW as his own man makes an interesting twist. He'll consider the Donovan Caine name property of APW and "Legion" will be also and drop them. More info will be in my segment for this coming Asylum. It will be interesting to see Caine act like his own boss and whoever aligns with him has also commited secession from APW in his eyes and to the fans. Anyway FEEDBACK is welcome as always.

[Jason Cashe]

I am a BIG fan of this new style Caine. At first to be honest I wondered where the fuck it came from. Thought maybe you got probed by aliens, installed with some higher degree of a thought process and started improving but now I see you've just been hiding. I must ask though and excuse me if I seem ignorant to the term but what the greenest grass does "cannon fodder" mean? I can see it being a gay joke but then maybe not?

Very good improvements, keep them coming.

[Smash INC]

Cannon fodder basically means (highly) expendable.

I'll edit this with some feedback once I've done reading it.

EDIT:

I'll have to echo what Kash said about this.

Clearly something has either clicked in your head or you've planned something out because this has a strong essence of direction and purpose.

It's markedly different to what we were seeing earlier which I personally felt was below par for what I believed you had the potential to do. What you have now is direction and that is very important, whatever you've done to get this out is something I would urge you to continue doing.

Your writing has benefited immensely from it.

[Jason Cashe]

Oh that's just rude Caine...