Last feed back for a while guys

[yarmouth1]

I know i have asked for a lot of feedback on my Role play's/Promos but thought I would give it one more shot.

I tried to carry on from last week with the story and Yarmouth talking to his imaginary Father and thought it went ok.

This week will be more about Yarmouth's past so you can get to know the character a bit better.

It is hard for me as having dyslexia but that is not an excuse just fact and I'm giving it my all.

Here is the link for my Role play/promo for you guy's to mull over.

apwprez.proboards.com/index.cgi?board=meltdownrp&action=display&thread=10697

I do try to trash talk my opponent but some times struggle on what to say and it some times makes take me and hour or two to write my Role play out.

Do you see me improving with each week that goes by or am I going back wards.

Thanks Yarmouth.

[President Jeff]

I gotta say Yarmouth, I read your RP for this past Meltdown since I was helping Rebel judge the battle royal match and I gotta say, your RP's are way better now than when you first started here. I was very impressed with it compared to what you we're writing before. Keep up the good work and keep listening to the feedback

[The Soul Of Philly]

Despite the cheesy, "I've seen the future for you and it's bright" line, it was a great CD RP (Character Development). I enjoyed reading it and since the last RP of yours I gave feedback, the first Meltdown after Mayhem, you've improved.

And even if this is the last feedback you ask for publicly, if you need some in the future, you can ask me and I'll give ya some feedback.

[Nick Watson]

With a few more tweaks your rps will be pretty damn good, Yarmouth. You are making some serious strides in a short amount of time and you should be proud of that. You still have some work that needs to be done in the form of using the right words and grammar, but in the end I'm sure you will eventually get the grasp on that and become a top notch writer here on the boards. I personally look forward to seeing just how much you can progress over the course of the next few months. I will be rooting for you, Yarmouth.

[Jason Cashe]

I've been telling you how you can improve and you've done it to a tee. I am a Yarmouth fan because the struggle is seen more now and I personally like that. Makes it more you and that has to be easier to write with. Continue making strides and you will be a damn good Champion soon enough.

[yarmouth1]

Thanks guys for all the encouragement.