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Post by Reaver on Jul 7, 2012 3:08:21 GMT -4
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Post by Jules on Jul 7, 2012 5:40:20 GMT -4
Alrighty then, I saw and read this RP after I posted in the T4TB love thread, so I felt obliged to offer a comment or two.
-I like the comedy/parody side of things in Knuckles promos. Admittedly, sometimes the humour doesn't work for me, but this one did nicely. The 'art' explanations were nicely written with an authentic feel of someone talking at an exhibition and there were certainly some high moments, I liked the joke about the general in the Dionysus skit. Toilet humour, but good toilet humour. This aspect of the RP certainly makes it stand out and if even if I don't always enjoy some of the jokes, I know every week I'm looking out for your RPs because you are going to give me something to read, that I am going to take an interest and form a judgement on, whether it's about loving it or hating it.
-I won't go into details about the shoot but will make two points: stylistically it is distinct because it is clear Knuckles the wrestler is talking, not Knuckles the jester as we find in the parody part of the RP. This is good because even though you use colours to distinguish between the two, the writing style should do that anyway. Second, I think you sold pretty well in the shoot, and I'm glad Knuckles the wrestler rectifies Knuckles the jester's burial of Smith and Stryker in the art parody. That is important for me because in the exaggerated parody you can get away with saying something that is a burial because it is hyperbolic, but saying Stryker will struggle in his match because he is up against two champions is much better than 'you're out of your league', so you kind of save Knuckles' face credibility there (I read somewhere Knuckles is face now).
-It's a good effort mate and you should keep doing what you are doing because you're doing it well. I don't know your attitude to 'winning' in this hobby, but I hope a few 'losses' don't stop you from writing Knuckles this way. You have a natural feel for a certain type of comedic writing that hits good notes more often than it hits bad ones, so if you enjoy doing this stick at it. It makes you stand out every week which is important in this hobby. Personally, if I could be as funny as you I'd write this way all the time.
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Post by A.C. Smith on Jul 7, 2012 21:25:03 GMT -4
I really enjoyed this. It's tough to find an original way to break down the entire TFTB field, but you did it and you did it well. I'll agree with Farq that you've got a talent with writing comedy; it's all about finding what works and what doesn't, and I thought this worked really well. Nice job!
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