Tommy Bartlett
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Aubrey J. Parker really does make me rock hard... just sayin'
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Post by Tommy Bartlett on Sept 4, 2012 15:07:51 GMT -4
So that debut felt good but I haven't written anything in a long time and I feel rusty.
I know everyone's debuts kinda notoriously suck... What did you think of Tommy Bartlett's?
What did you like? What did you hate? Do you know a way I can improve?
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Post by Lord Raab on Sept 4, 2012 15:13:19 GMT -4
You need to put the link in here if you want feedback on the RP dude.
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Tommy Bartlett
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Aubrey J. Parker really does make me rock hard... just sayin'
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Post by Tommy Bartlett on Sept 4, 2012 17:44:25 GMT -4
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Tommy Bartlett
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Aubrey J. Parker really does make me rock hard... just sayin'
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Post by Tommy Bartlett on Sept 4, 2012 17:45:07 GMT -4
By the way... What's a "Killerplauze"?
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Tommy Bartlett
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Aubrey J. Parker really does make me rock hard... just sayin'
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Post by Tommy Bartlett on Sept 4, 2012 17:55:53 GMT -4
31 times this was read and no one wants to help?
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Post by President Jeff on Sept 4, 2012 18:01:28 GMT -4
No one is obligated to leave feedback. Plus, its hard to give feedback on a debut RP
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Tommy Bartlett
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Aubrey J. Parker really does make me rock hard... just sayin'
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Post by Tommy Bartlett on Sept 4, 2012 18:15:19 GMT -4
Fair enough. Just thought I'd try.
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Post by Your JESUS on Sept 4, 2012 18:25:10 GMT -4
Killerplauze is fat belly I think we talked about it before so I think that's what it was.
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Post by Jason Cashe on Sept 4, 2012 19:45:29 GMT -4
Well I Liked the promo. It's well written, shows potential without question but like Jeff said. It's a debut. In APW we have a heavy Shoot aspect and you seem to at least play to that. Do homework, research opponents and you should have plenty to go on. I see the potential, now it's just about if you can stick to it and learn to not take losing badly. Not saying you'll lose but too many guys with potential want to go 100-0 and here, it's all about entertaining each other not just ourselves. Hope this helps man.
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Post by Lord Raab on Sept 4, 2012 20:18:53 GMT -4
Ah that explains everything on why I kind of lose matches so much because it's mostly a shoot based place rather than being creative side of things. Damn makes me think I have to change my style completely just for this fed alone.
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Post by The Soul Of Philly on Sept 4, 2012 20:28:34 GMT -4
Ah that explains everything on why I kind of lose matches so much because it's mostly a shoot based place rather than being creative side of things. Damn makes me think I have to change my style completely just for this fed alone. I think the point of APW being a trash talk fed has been stressed so much in the past week, let alone in the months I've been here, should have been a hint |
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Post by Lord Raab on Sept 4, 2012 20:33:58 GMT -4
I think I been in too many feds that focus on creativity rather than actually trash talking opponents. Only just now that I saw Jason's post that I came to realize it's about that rather than creativity. I wished I realized it before.
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Post by The Soul Of Philly on Sept 4, 2012 20:35:55 GMT -4
Well you made it to Asylum and figured that out before ya got too deep in it.
Bartlett, when you post your first RP for Meltdown, I'll give ya some feedback IN THIS TOPIC, so no need to go making another topic. No need to put your balls out again, B-Harv was bad enough
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Post by President Jeff on Sept 4, 2012 20:37:12 GMT -4
You still should be creative with your RP's. There are ways to be creative and trash talk.
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Post by Johnny Rebel on Sept 4, 2012 20:55:43 GMT -4
You need both. Straight trash talk is boring...character development adds another level.
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Post by Lord Raab on Sept 4, 2012 20:58:50 GMT -4
Good point guys.
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Post by Jason Cashe on Sept 4, 2012 21:05:56 GMT -4
Yeah I was gonna dig into you Raab for saying Creative and then this "Other" style that we use like we're some Garbage Writing fed. You're a REAL character in a CAW Based eWorld. So to be creative even here you need to be creative with any and all words used. If Asylum was longer in word count, more CD would be used. A scene, the CD can be simple or have purpose and in APW we do a damn good job at having a well balanced blend. On all the shows.
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Post by Lord Raab on Sept 4, 2012 21:17:02 GMT -4
I apologize if I offended anyone with the comments I said as I don't think what I type sometimes. I could never talk bad about this place because I really do like it here. I feel that everyone is talented here and we are all here for a reason to have fun.
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Post by Jason Cashe on Sept 4, 2012 21:25:12 GMT -4
You're cool enough and a female so instantly get a pass from me. I have nothing bad to say about you Raab. It's good to ask questions and get the feel for a place so you're good dud..chick..Ms. Thang! WHATEVER IT IS I'M SUPPOSE TO CALL YOU!!
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Post by Your JESUS on Sept 4, 2012 23:19:55 GMT -4
Raab is a chick, playing a dude. Props...I think women characters in the world of wrestling against guys is so unbelievable!!!
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Post by Jason Cashe on Sept 4, 2012 23:59:45 GMT -4
Sally will crucify you...Is that too much for a Jesus reference?
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Post by Your JESUS on Sept 5, 2012 0:27:49 GMT -4
Not saying that female characters aren't good or women handlers. Just saying in terms of realism since people always criticize that. I think your weed refrence to weed being on TV was criticized as not believable.
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Post by Jason Cashe on Sept 5, 2012 3:01:08 GMT -4
Yeah I know, and for the most part it's why Kash doesn't smoke a full 24 hours before a show and doesn't touch it until after a show. More recently he hasn't had it period and I'm liking him being without it. That happened once and I got that it was unrealistic which is why it hasn't happened since or much before.
Sara Del Ray in real life has fought men inside the ring. Chyna has fought and competed against men. It does happen in real life and in this world, it's more of a realism than in real life. I accept women holding their own in any field, this being one of them. I argued that some women should compete against men in the Olympics. This is a world full of misguided views and sexist is one of them. I play alot but in truth Sally can write and compete with anyone, if not out right beat them. Who am I or anyone other than Jeff to tell her or even comment that it's not realistic?
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Post by President Jeff on Sept 5, 2012 3:08:15 GMT -4
Raab is a chick, playing a dude. Props...I think women characters in the world of wrestling against guys is so unbelievable!!! Its all how you write it. Its like comparing Rey Mysterio fighting anyone since he's the size of a diva |
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Post by Level-Two on Sept 5, 2012 7:16:54 GMT -4
Read the shows... and the fact our wrestlers are not only still standing, but wrestling a mere week later!
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Post by Lord Raab on Sept 5, 2012 7:38:26 GMT -4
I believe I said this before and I say it again that I am not very good at playing as female wrestlers for some reason. My Fizz character is the only female character I actually have because I tried a different one once and it just didn't work out for me. There's a few feds out there that have male handlers playing as female characters but not the other way around funny enough.
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Post by Mark Mania on Sept 5, 2012 8:23:52 GMT -4
Chicks got boobies.
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Tommy Bartlett
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Aubrey J. Parker really does make me rock hard... just sayin'
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Post by Tommy Bartlett on Sept 5, 2012 9:59:59 GMT -4
Thanks for all the feedback, guys (and girl, apparently) despite the fact that this went way off the rails on a tangent. Let me know what you guys think after Meltdown.
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Post by Your JESUS on Sept 5, 2012 14:18:40 GMT -4
Bartlett doesn't like girls or boobs...
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Post by President Jeff on Sept 5, 2012 15:12:30 GMT -4
Thanks for all the feedback, guys (and girl, apparently) despite the fact that this went way off the rails on a tangent. Let me know what you guys think after Meltdown. Your new here, you'll learn quick that every topic goes off topic pretty quick ;D |
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