Meltdown 9/17 Feedback

[Johnny Rebel]

Show is in the books!

Fantastic showing from those who did show this week. I had some really hard decisions to make and really struggled to pick a winner in a couple of instances. Kudos to all of you who showed!

Thanks to Kash, Envi and Bartlett for writing matches this week.

Segment bonuses go to Lively, Envi, M&M, Streets Wilson, Bartlett, and Young Mannie. If I missed anybody, let me know!

Lots of new feuds getting underway right now. Love it.

[Vincent Pennington]

I am looking forward to the next show and where the feuds develop. Very well written and great job this week guys.

[Tommy Bartlett]

Loved the show...who was that amazing, charming, good looking writer who did the opening match? Now that man should be a World Champion... loved the way the aftermath of the match came off too.

But enough Barry Horowitz-style backpatting... I love the way all the segments came together (and not just because I was in most of them) and I thought that Lively's and Envi's and Mannie's segments were pure gold. The cliffhanger at the end was awesome too.

I'm really proud to be part of such a quality efed... now if only we could get more people roleplaying...

[The Soul Of Philly]

I'll have more feedback on the show later, but Bartlett, only two people no showed, thats a solid showing. Glad to see segments continue this week, even though it took what seemed like teeth pulling from Rebel and Jeff for you guys to get segments in, really shouldn't be the case. Hopefully they don't have to next week.

[Tommy Bartlett]

Can't wait to see the card for next week

[Jason Cashe]

Very good show, a bit long with the segments. Seemed to have more of a soap opera theme to this week's show. Congrats to Bartlett, and all those who won their matches. Salieri no showing isn't a surprise for me, he's a e-career flake and should be smashed and removed. I'll write the Mr. Dangerous Vs. Salieri match, PLEASE!!!

I hope for what it was that Mannie appreciated his match. Other than that another Meltdown in the books, great show and it's interesting to see what Lively and his band of fuckers do next.

[Tommy Bartlett]

Lively And The Fuckers? Should that be our stable name, lol? I think it has a nice ring to it.

Please don't do Salieri vs Mr Dangerous

I'd love Bartlett to have a match with any of the men that he and Sabur decimated tonight... Krunk, Shadow, or Salieri. Tommy Bartlett is a man who has some serious ass whoopings coming to him. If you're going to put Salieri out, please let Tommy Bartlett make an example out of him. It would be much better for the story.

[Tommy Bartlett]

Though I think Tommy Bartlett vs Young Mannie would be the next obvious choice...

[yarmouth1]

Cracking show Mr Rebel and the ending was awesome, a few mistakes with the coding but nothing to worry about, the Lively segment was out of this world I am starting to be a fan of his lots of segments this week like I always say the segments make a show but like some one said it was prob with Jeff and Rebel giving you guys a rollicking so keep this up guys for the weeks a head.

Only two no shows hey great stuff but would be nice if there was a full on Role play just to make Mr rebel work that bit harder cos the quality of this weeks Role plays were outstanding.

Top stuff fella's.

[Streets Wilson]

great results. the matches were great. The segments were great. personally, I always enjoy it more when matches end with a finisher, but hey, I'm not writing them. I really liked the way the matches flowed this week, you couldn't tell who was going to win. That's good writing.

[ComiKaze]

A couple of things before i get started.

A) Its great to see that when feed back is given, both positive and negative that it reflects on the show. SOme may have taken my comments as a negative thing last week, but am glad I said what I did because it helped this show tremendously.

B) I dropped the ball on my segment. I had it written and didnt send it in, so my bad on that. Im still trying to develop my characters so I need to get my segments in.. Bad ComiKaze, BAD!


Anyway, on with the show.


Firs things of note, its great to see a balance between segments and matches. Moreso the matches. This week they were exactly what they were meant to be. Summarized for the most and then a main event written fully. Great stuff. But more on that later

Opening segment. Michael Lively. What more do you want. It puts him over exactly how it is meant to be and without any interruptions from others. This is the Michael Lively that I like to see and I got it. Coulnt be happier. Dependant on his time on Meltdown and what happens in the Tag division, would love to go up against him at one point.

Would have been a great match if all parties had participated. Either Ace was disappointed with the loss last week and he didnt show, or Real life hit him, and with a young kid its understandable. Either way I hope he gave notice to Rebel (judging by the comments after the match, probably not, shame)

Either way, not to take away from Bartlett, he was put overe as a BEAST! It showed him perfectly, he just needs to carry the momentum over and we have a monster hell on our hands.

The 'Bartlett Blue'

Bartlett: I don't get it, so you sling shot a bird across the screen?

Like the Hannah Storm Purple, Mega hard to read without squinting.

The Bartlett segment.

Not a bad segment, but through no fault of his own, I guess he hadnt seen the match before. Would have been great to see it follow that through a bit more. But with both being written and a secret from the other its hard to do that sometimes. A decent segment, but would have been nice to see the actions here carried through from the opening match. Ok it was an attack, but ti needed that link if you knwo what I mean.

No fault of his, No fault of anyones really.

I know it is a different 'reach for the stars' but when I read that of Logans entrance, I think of this



Can just imaging him coming down doing the dance to this ;D

The Snakeboy/Logan match had enough inteferance because it was a summarized match, any more would have taken away from the match itself. Great to see Snakeboy come out with a victory, and that furthers the story line further. All the great tag teams lose singles matches but win the tag matches (Kofi/Truth vs PTP) so a great sense of realism there.

logan is a great writer and this week I got the better. Any other week and he would. Kudos my friend.

great to see the Commentator split as well, West is a fan of Comikaze and Harris is a fan of M&M. Going to enjoy this storyline and some great people to work with. Good Job ont hsi match Rebel.

The Streets Wilson Segment didnt exactly 'grab' me but I wasnt turned off by it. You are returnign and you got your point across, some large clumps of text which sometimes distract on a show, next time go for some interaction so it isnt just an extended RP

Tek no showed so this one was self explanitory. Great to see Mannie pick up the win, but you can tell this match was written before deadline, whereas the the Ace/Bartlett was written/added stuff to it after the no show. Still put Tek over in a certain way, but he fucked if he no shows next time, so either man up or dont waste our time. Good job Mannie.

Good segment from mannie, again I feel thsi was written after the deadline, whearas the Bartlett one was written before. THis linked in with the match result and worked.

Lively beaten two weeks running? Damn! Greta match, 4 quality guys. Great job.

Mannie still flowing on the segments, ncie to see it all follow through.

AJP following through things from my RP. Brilliant! Not many would so its a greta eye there and shows you are reading my RP's and making it work with segments. I dont know if AJP wrote it, or Evan or Pennington in the end, either way I say a thankyou because it was a great segment. We need to put our heads together so we can get something flowing nicely.

Lively is doing exactly what he needs to do as Champ, great opening to this match.

Salieri can suck a dick.

great ending to the match, who won! WHO WON GODDAMIT!!

Something I wouldnt expect top see on meltdown, but why not? Works perfectly and both guys deserve it.


Sorry for the ramlbe again, but I feel feedback is as good as you make it. Last week everything I said seemed to have been noted whether it was positive or negative and adapted. So if it takes an essay for feedback, then so beit. I feel it helps me more than anyone, but i feel it beats one line feeback, but thats just me.

Great job to everyone involved, I definately enjoyed this week more.

[Tommy Bartlett]

Actually, Bartlett/Andrews was written after the roleplay deadline too... just sayin'

[ComiKaze]

Sept 18, 2012 10:00:30 GMT -4 Tommy Bartlett said:

Actually, Bartlett/Andrews was written after the roleplay deadline too... just sayin'

Which was implied if you actually read it properly.

I said I felt the match was written after the deadline. If was the segment that i felt didnt have the follow on from the match, Like it was written without knowing what happened in the match

So I dont get your point?

Just sayin'

[ComiKaze]

You must be referring to the segment, not the match where I wrote

Good segment from mannie, again I feel this was written after the deadline, whearas the Bartlett one was written before.

I was referring to the bartlett/Salieri segment not the match with Andrews

[Jason Cashe]

Salieri can suck a dick, I am now a fan of Comikaze! Awesome!

And yes, I wrote Tek/Mannie and wanted to sell Mannie's injury he had from the break in assault so that's the ONLY reason Tek got in some moves.

[Streets Wilson]

I actually wasn't even going to send a segment in this week, I was just gonna wait until next week but I read that no segments had been sent in somewhere so I just hastily wrote that like an hour before the deadline of 8pm. I was glad to see that apparently other segments did get sent in though. I yearn for the days when I literally just had a backup of several microsoft word documents full of Streets Wilson RP's and content including full RP's, speaking points, or just 1 sentence ideas for RP themes and such. That computer was unfortunately thrown out a while ago and I'll never remember some of that unused stuff. Whatever.

[Tommy Bartlett]

So around when is next week's card usually posted?

[Your JESUS]

First off thank you to the people in the main event for your permission to write the segments involving your characters. I hope it all played out well. I tried to sell Lively as the ego filled mastermind trying to cover all his bases having it backfire. I tried to play it in a presumption role where Lively/Bartlett/Sabur all had deniability. I also didn't want to paint anyone's character in too bad of a light so that's why I didn't show the acts themselves. I also wanted you guys to get the redemption in the end. Hopefully all angle were covered and put over.

First match, well written, not surprised. Loved the angle and the squash...if you don't like getting played like a bitch show the fuck up to play!!! Nuff said!!!

Logan/Snake match good match. 

Streets Wilson segment I personally loved it, especially with so many people not knowing you around here. I personally am a fan, in character Lively says...Tell your mom hello!!! Good work my friend. 

As for the statement that the show looked or felt a little too soap opera, that's BS!!! Segments build characters and story lines. We are all writers portraying a story, in a wrestling world. I feel that the wrestling portion is a huge key, but love segments and build. Also when people are told rock some segments and the roster steps up, kudos. As long as the segments makes sense some what, have a direction or even offer something like an evil side to your character, or add comedy then well done.


Young Mannie good job, stick with it, and watch out for the Porn bro. 

Now for the main event, the tag match well written. I love that Streets went over on me, good work well deserved...the belts calling you. Problem is it's strapped around Lively's waist and I have a little bit of an ego problem, so step up!!!

Triple threat...the real main event great job Envi!! Stellar match writer. I loved it, surprise finish!!! Makes for next weeks excitement!!! I love this place!!! 

[President Jeff]

Sept 18, 2012 18:38:24 GMT -4 Tommy Bartlett said:

So around when is next week's card usually posted?

Never ask when stuff will be posted. We've been around for almost 5 years, how about you look at the dates of when stuff it posted and look for a pattern

[Tommy Bartlett]

Wow... ok... didn't mean to commit a faux pas. My bad, post it whenever you're ready. I was just eager is all.

[President Jeff]

When you build a reputation of things ALWAYS being posted on time consitantly, plus your question is the #1 pet peeve of all fed heads/GM's. Then you can understand why that question is a Big No No

[Tommy Bartlett]

Duly noted

[President Jeff]

Back on Topic

Great show last night. Great to see lots of segments. And your welcome for the idea of the ending

[Johnny Rebel]

The card for next week will be posted tonight, as well as a special news bulletin from GM Johnny Diamond regarding Lively's opponent for One Night in Hell.