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[Streets Wilson]

Hello everyone, I posted a rp in the house show section and just wanted to hear if anyone had anything to say about it (was it good? Did it suck? You know) Its obviously just a short little introduction but I would still like to hear a little feedback and it would be greatly appreciated.

[President Jeff]

It was good and to the point. Really all a debut RP should be. Nothing too fancy. I look forward to reading more of your work

[Phate]

Not bad. There was a grammatical error or two but nothing that hurt the overall RP. The microphone was an odd thing to have in the RP, especially because of the setting, but that's just my opinion. It came off a bit odd too because it seemed like a debut Video Package that became an interview. I say work on structure and making the dialogue feel more relaxed and conversational; it came off a bit wooden in some areas.

[Twister]

I actually had to go back and re read it to see what phate was talking about... But yeah I agree with him. Theres definately potential there, and I know debuts suck. Look forward to seeing what you can do when in match action.

[Streets Wilson]

I greatly appreciate people actually responding because normally people just read me asking for feedback and then leave. About the guy having a microphone I can see how you would say it was out of place but if you read it the guy says Streets asked him to come out and do the interview. so its like this is where Streets Wilson had him meet him for the interview, and he would bring a mic attached to the camera. So since Streets asked him to be there, he just walks up to the camera and starts talking, leaving the interview guy confused. Thats my attempt at being funny. But thanks everyone for the feedback it really helps me want to be a part of this place and obviously this is just a disposable debut rp.

[President Jeff]

No disposable RP's here man. Every RP counts. Unless you post past deadline without an extention, then it won't count ;D