my rp

[Jason Royce]

hey folks i would like feed back on my first post for overdrive ok it would be great, the scene interludes i blacked out by acident, so just hilight them to see when the scene is taking place feedback would be great

Jason

[iggy]

Look I am not going to talk about content or anything here because I have no idea what works here and what does. My first match is next week.

Saying that.

Your font color choices are horrible. Dude. Red, then a Dark Red and a Black Letter font color? It hurt my eyes and hard to read.

My experience in e-fedding if you make it easy to read you score higher.

Change your font colors using black and red is over done in efedding to make your character scary. Go for something different.

Saying that! The color Lime is Iggy's! Stay away from it!

[Jason Royce]

i know i know man but i was trying something really new and what i really wanted feed back on was how the rp sounded and everything like that from beginning to end besides the colors did you like it at all

[President Jeff]

Your improving Jason. your last 2 RP's you can see that your trying and putting effort in your RP's.

For this RP, like Iggy said about the colors. You gotta be careful in teh colors you pick. Before posing your RP, preview it first to see what it will look like when you post.

another thing, when you have a conversation between people, make sure you clearly identify who's talking. either by using different colors with each person talking, or putting "Name: Blah Blah Blah"

and 3rd, take the time to type up entire words. Like for example instead of putting "U" actually type "you" taking short cuts like that makes your RP's look sloppy and lazy.

but keep up the good work JAson

[Your JESUS]

Stop!!!! No more feedback, no more help, if in true jobber form he defeated me and Tony, then with help, and guidance well then they won't be beaten. So enough is enough, no way can we have a talented bunch of jobbers....just kidding good work, keep trying hard, it's paying off