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Post by Scrap on Nov 7, 2012 16:26:23 GMT -4
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Post by Anthony Bailey on Nov 7, 2012 17:48:55 GMT -4
I browsed through it so forgive me if my feedback seems a bit uninformed, but I think your character could use a bit more originality. The T.I. pic base along with how your character communicates and his biography makes me think you're just trying to bring T.I. to the e-fed world. And that's good and all but you will be much better off in the long run giving your character his own identity.
It's obvious that you are a T.I. fan and a fan of mainstream Hip Hop music (Shut up Kash lol) but use your promos to illustrate what he is truly all about, his strengths, his weaknesses, etc.
I only use Drake as my pic base because he physically embodied what I had in mind for my character but if you read my promos, there's no hint of Drake in him. I have given him his own identity and that has allowed me to keep fresh ideas flowing.
Just my two cents...
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Post by Jason Cashe on Nov 7, 2012 19:45:56 GMT -4
I....Whatever Bailey!
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Post by Anthony Bailey on Nov 8, 2012 0:23:59 GMT -4
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Post by Scrap on Nov 8, 2012 11:04:10 GMT -4
okay i get that i really do but im asking about the quality of the promo im working on it you know
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Post by Jason Cashe on Nov 8, 2012 18:00:13 GMT -4
Look man, in APW the "Feedback" forums aren't for EVERY rp you post. When you do ask for some feedback though, expect the negative with the positives. They will always be there because NOBODY writes perfect. Not Kurt Noble, not Sally Talfourd or even myself (Although *Pops Collar* I'm close...Okay I'm lying..)
Still if you're posting wanting feedback you will get all of it not just the quality. You're new so you'll get the hang of things and thus far you're doing pretty good. He was just saying that if you continue to carry the character as a carbon copy of TI then nobody will care. People will lose interest QUICKLY unless they don't know who TI is and then you'd be good. So the QUALITY is a bit off because of the copied gimmick. Make him your own, with my character who I've used for 11 years out of the 14 I've done this, I make him as much to who I am and what I've seen and done as I can. His mental state is mine just increased, his background in the hood is mine, I started selling drugs (Marijuana, Coke, and Acid) by the time I was 12. That's old shit I've experienced. It works MUCH easier to write and get a feel of who the character is when it has some of you in it.
Some people like to write outside their lines and that's fine, often works GREAT. However you still need to have some originality to it. Don't be Young Mannie who compares everything to something in real wrestling. Lets do this like so and so did! Booo...I hope you stick around man and don't take this so seriously because after all, you asked for the feedback.
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