Can I please get some feedback?

["The Welsh Dragon" Dan White]

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It's my first Rasslemania promo.

It's a little patchy, though I figured I would go through the in-character reason I didn't appear on Overdrive, along with how my pre-show match at Rasslemania came to fruition. Let's just hope I'm allowed to write a second RP!

["The Welsh Dragon" Dan White]

I'm reading a lot of stuff tomorrow so anyone who has made a topic for feedback will get some from me. Can I get feedback on my promos please? Second RP is here:

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Made it a straight monologue. Not the writing limit, far from it but sometimes I prefer to leave scenery out and just write full pelt.