Meltdown 6/3 Feedback

[Evan De Parker]

Thanks to Jules, Pepsi, Knox, and Gooch for helping with match-writing.,

Credit goes to Guv, Niobe, Jerry Matthews, Savage, Emerald Assassin, Red Scorpion, Delikado, Gooch, AJP, Logan, Holmes, Madison, Sentinel, Blood, Jennings, Jewel, Knox, and a special thanks to CRW's Talon for segments tonight!

Feedback is greatly appreciated and encouraged, as well as discussion. Let us know what you liked, didn't like, or what we can work on!

Also, if I forgot to credit anybody, let me know.

[Talon]

Really enjoyed reading the show.

I always enjoy contributing/working with APW, and it always comes out very naturally.

Looking forward to doing some more spots down the line, as long as you'll have me!


Thanks again!

[Jace]

I just got done reading the results, and a big thanks to the match, and segment writers for putting on a good show. It flowed really well together. Now my opinion. I thought it was interesting Knox shows up after my segment I didn't know that was going to happen maybe a stroke of luck, but it was a good job. Gooch as always I enjoy you writing my matches is was great, but you took both of the names to Jaces finishers and made them one. Bank Roll and Money in the mouth lol. I'm happy with the win. I'm sure it was a difficult choice. I had some tough competition. I thought MELTDOWN was segment heavy from other shows, but I get the syndicate taking over, and maybe Meltdown stars aside from those who do can put up a segment. A short on if you don't have a lot of time. To me it almost feels like if we aren't going to add to our show then they will, and we should be doing it. Guvnor I enjoy your work. The stay to Meltdown was kind of a surprise for me. Catherine Jewel vs Red Scorpion i'm not sure what to make of. Red Scorpion just took the match. The Un-forgiven (Zachariah Blood & Sentinel) vs Brian Hollywood & “Madman” Chris Madison was a lot of back and forth but everyone involved did a good job can't wait to see more rp's from these guys. The Guvnor vs Robina was a good match like always. I enjoyed working with them last week and Now Guv is staying on Meltdown I look forward to getting a chance to work with him and Robina again. Well that's my feed back great job guys.

[B.A. Styles]

I ain't good at making long feedback, but seeing that I can't request feedback until I give a few, I guess it won't hurt to start giving more feedback (no matter how crappy it is, lol).

Credit to all the matchwriters since not only was the matches nice to red but they made me want to read them. I won't lie, I originally was about to skim the entire thing until Robina's match but after seeing how the six pack challenge ended (finisher galore, lol) I was instantly hooked into reading all the matches. My favourite match of the night was the Robina Hood vs The Guv'nor main event. NO it isn't because I FINALLY beat Jules (which I'm personally not sure if I should be ecstatic or thinking "how the fuck did I win?" lol) hell if I lose again then it would still be match of the match...mainly because the ending was incredible, or at least the buildup to the ending was. When Guv kicked out of Execution I thought "damn I've lost again" but when Robina kicked out of the Gypsy Kiss I was suddenly "holy shit I'm going to actually win!" This was further brought out when my character used Guv's own finisher against him yet when he kicked out I ended up not knowing who to expect to win. And when a match makes you feel like that, then its bound to be a great match (hell one of my favourite matches of 2012 was the first Big Show vs Sheamus match because I didn't know what to expect in the end). The fact that Robina ended Guv'nor four months of domination, which I personally value as an (IC & OOC) upset, was just the cherry on top.

HOLY SHIT HOW MANY SEGMENTS ARE THERE!?! Lol, I actually enjoy shows with alot of segments since, as I watch Smackdown back in 2004/5, I enjoy seeing all the characters on the screen and how they all act...but when I learnt mroe about behind the scene stuff, especially with eFedding, the amount of segments gives me a very positive view that lots of people wants to contribute in one way or the other (even if they can write matches or not). But I don't fully understand why both The League of Extraordinary Wrestlers and The New Sindicate were advertised...perhaps I've been stupidly blind but none of these people have anything to do with Meltdown at the moment, especially considering that none of them are members of Meltdown (feel free to correct me btw). I understand if the two groups are going to have a feud throughout Asylum and Overdrive but there is no Meltdown member involved with any of this...so those adverts feel quite a bit out of place. But I did like reading them though.

My favourite segment however has to be the very last one. I found it so bloody funny that, after so much buildup, Guv simple told Sienna that he ain't going anywhere...only some people can make constantly trolling the GM work and Jules has managed to make it work brilliantly so he practically deserve man of the night.

So overall:
Match of the Night - The Guv’nor vs. Robina Hood (the whackiness of the six pack challenge earns it a well-deserved nomination)
Segment of the Night - Guv'nor RE-signing to Meltdown
Star of the Night - The Guv'nor
Star Rating: 4 Stars, some bits were nutty but it is definitely worth recording if it was actually on television.

[Shadow]

I will review and leave feedback tonight.

[T-Marv]

Just a note about the Sindicate/League advertisements

I get that it feels a little out of place on Meltdown. But for next week we're incorporating Meltdown guys into a Sin vs. League match. THat's why it took place on Meltdown... We wouldn't just randomly through ourselves in there on a show we had no business on. Also... There are two tag teams involved... MM and Delikado... Tag Teams are a staple of Meltdown hence why it's happening here.

Anyways, just to clear up some confusion.

[warrenpeace]

I am just now getting a chance to read through the show. I skimmed it, so forgive me if I don't get into detail or overlook your stuff. This is my only day off, and I have a lot to do.

Glad Jace and Robina are moving forward in T4TB.
LIked the Yanzel/Seng Real stuff. Even more so glad he wanted to include Warren in his bit.
I am really glad that universe somehow gave us the Red Scorpion at the exact same time I created a superhero character. Really loving this guys stuff and feel like the two of us have some great stuff to sink our teeth into. Hope we can work together on segments a little closer though.
Skipping to the end of the show, I was not expecting Guv' to stay on Meltdown. IDK if you guys have just been writing it that well or if I am just simple minded, but I really didn't see it coming. As a plot device it was a great way to continue their feud. And I remain intrigued by the dynamic of Sienna v Guv.

That's about all I have time for atm.

[Jules]

I'm going to do a quick run through, but first the mandatory word of thanks to Evan and the whole Meltdown carnival for putting together another fantastic show.

There's a lot of segments in this show, so much so there seems to be an hour's worth of TV material before we even get to the first match. It's not a complaint because I know Evan (as do all the GMs) do their utmost to fit in everything, and it's an unenviable job making that flow. Just an observation really.

I like the presence of Jace Savage early on, and it was great to see a young stud take the initiative in becoming the hub of hyping the six-pack. Not sure if it was planned the way it turned out, or whether that was due to sublime editing by Evan. Whoever's design it was fantastic. Good win for Jace too; I like to see keen up and comers getting the push they deserve. Good luck at T4TB.

In a fed were faction is the flavour of the month, nice to see a different take on it with Tommy Knox. I've never really seen a MC angle done as anything other than filler, so if Tommy's boys are to becoming something of a running crew/ringside heavies then it could work out.

Nice short seg from Yanzel that consolidates his face-ness, and gives a rub to the match with Sang Real.

I'll comment on the factions here. I remember the late 90s when stables were a big thing in WWE/WCW, so it's good to see something like this panning out. It's a nice, fresh dynamic to the fed. Obviously my concern would be that right now it's at breaking point in terms of much of the roster being spread across factions. But I got no beef with anyone trying this out, although it's come about more by coincidence than collective design as I see it.

I don't usually like to see 'outsiders' on shows unless there is strong storyline reason for it, but aside from all the Sin/League stuff being very entertaining this week (I loved both faux movie trailers), it was excellent build to next week. Also, good to see these 'outsiders' giving back to Meltdown with the stip that made it a six-person involving Meltdown(ers). The addition of Red Scorpion and Emerald Assassin adds a neat dimension to it.

One Delikado line had me creased, so I have to quote it.

Delikado: Relax, bro. This guy can't even afford "Just For Men" to hide his grays. He's given up, and yet he uses Linkin Park as a theme song. He's CLEARLY gotta have emotional problems out the wazoo, and if his slut sidekick doesn't suck him down dead, no doubt one good bump on the head will.

The well never runs dry.

This was my least favourite of all of Michael Jennings segments in the past few months. For me it just felt like a segment for the sake of a segment, felt a bit forced and awkward to me, and didn't really do a great deal to sell the Cath Jewell character. If I knew nothing about her, I am no closer to knowing anything other than she's Jennings' GF and new to Meltdown after reading it.

To make them work these intro promos really need to SELL HARD what the character is about, otherwise I say leave them out.

The Red Scorpion is quickly becoming my favourite character on Meltdown.

The Unforgiven look a sold unit. My advice would be go it alone right now. Nothing against NBK, but see my comment above about not stretching the roster too much. You boys came in as a tag team, stick to that and make it your bread and butter before any possible branching out.

In the post-match excellent work from Chris Madison. I like people who don't sit around waiting for Evan to throw them a bone.

Yanzel and Sang Real is something that's brewed along a little under the radar possibly, but I like the work both sides are doing, and it's really doing plenty for both sides. Nice to see a Warren cameo (sort of) in this, good to see he hasn't been completely buried (figuratively).

I'm going to refrain from talking too much about the stuff I'm involved in, but it's nice to read a positive reaction. Rest assured, it ain't over yet!

A few words about Robina Hood. It's been a genuine pleasure working alongside you. It's not a false compliment when I say I believe you one of the most improved writers in the whole fed in the past 2-3 months. The standard of the promo work in your RPs in particular has been excellent against The Guv. I'm glad Robina was the one that ended 'the streak', and you fully deserve your chance at T4TB.

I hope the match went over well. I was a bit disappointed with the cage match I wrote for Mayhem, but I felt this match, as a definitive final match in this saga, told a much better story and as I wrote it felt like an accumulation of what Robina and I have been building, and the conclusion of the match accurately captured what the rivalry has become about.

I don't usually get so excited about the matches I write, but this one felt good, and I'm satisfied with how it's turned out. It was a good win for Robina Hood, one the work the handler has done deserved, and I see this as Robina's chance to really go on and become Meltdown's #1 draw in the next couple of months.

I'll leave it at that. Good job all round. Should be a great show next week.

[dark9136]

dam never thought Catherine would be a joke 0.o

[President Jeff]

Its nice to see the newer people sending in segments. Good job guys

[Jules]

Jun 4, 2013 19:07:09 GMT -4 @dark9136 said:

dam never thought Catherine would be a joke 0.o

If this is a reply to my comment, that's not what I meant. If it's not, well what I'm about to write is superfluous.

My point was that the segment, which was essentially an introduction, didn't really do anything to make Catherine Jewell stand out. Like I said, all I got from it was that she's Jennings' girlfriend and a wrestler.

But what kind of wrestler is she? What is she going to bring to Meltdown, and where does she think she will fit in?

Listen, don't take it personally or as a dig. My comments are always intended to be constructive. I don't think CJ is a joke, my intention was rather to suggest that any segment you send in either tells part of CJ's story as a Meltdown wrestler, or in some way makes her stand out.

Look at this show, look at how many segments there are. On a given show you have maybe 500 words to make people notice and remember your character, make them want to work with you etc.

For all I know the Catherine Jewell character could be captivating and exciting, but this segment (and my comments were only about the segment) was a bit bland and didn't really show me anything about the character.

Maybe I'm wrong, but just a bit of advise based on my viewpoint. But I'm not just a critic. You ever want to discuss the character send me a PM, and if I can assist I'll be happy to.

[dark9136]

Thanks I guesses

[Lord Raab]

Don't be offended chick. Jules has helped me a ton since I've been here a year now and I still get help even now from him.

He will help you improve your RP's a lot like he's done with me recently and even gave me some nice segment ideas recently too.

[Jason Cashe]

Red Scorpion dropping down and kidnapping (if that's the proper word) Emerald Assassin (Should be Weapon) was the coolest part of the entire show to me. So much else that could take the cake easily but it was Sting like but much cooler cause he plucked him like a flower. Just a great spot overall for the show.

I was only in the show briefly but I thought minus a few things it was a tremendous show. I won't go into negatives though, that never helps coming from me.

7/10 Rating.

[Sentinel]

Have to say...Hollywood tripping over the ropes getting into the ring made me laugh out loud.

Aside from that, this show was heavy in a good way. So much going on that you had to pay attention or you'd miss it. The interactions between the Harrisons, Aubrey, Logan and others were priceless. Having worked with them in the past it's easy to see that they're still on their game.

Red Scorpion was also entertaining as always. Yanzel looks like he could use some help against the second-gen rabble-rousers Sang Real and Robina Hood shocked the world by beating Guv'Nor.

And next week? I'm betting it gets even crazier.

8.5/10

( I know the feedback's kinda week. Battling allergies and meds make me loopy. )

[Tommy Knox]

@ Kash

Emerald Weapon ... Easy to beat.

[Jason Cashe]

I know but he picked Emerald.

[warrenpeace]

Jun 4, 2013 22:06:22 GMT -4 Jason Cashe said:

Red Scorpion dropping down and kidnapping (if that's the proper word) Emerald Assassin (Should be Weapon) was the coolest part of the entire show to me. So much else that could take the cake easily but it was Sting like but much cooler cause he plucked him like a flower. Just a great spot overall for the show.

I was only in the show briefly but I thought minus a few things it was a tremendous show. I won't go into negatives though, that never helps coming from me.

7/10 Rating.

Right, I can't wait to explore what the hell happened to Emerald ASSASSIN. I knew he would be interfering but wasn't sure how and that to me was great. I'm even going to probably write everything up tonight.

Also, very excited our feud is now being featured with the likes of EnviKado and MNM.

[warrenpeace]

Jun 5, 2013 6:33:37 GMT -4 Tommy Knox said:

@ Kash

Emerald Weapon ... Easy to beat.

LOL some of you guys giving me so much shit over this name...I know it's generic. That's the point

SPOILER: Click to show

It is based on a comic that I write. His original name is the Crimson Chill. But since I planned on doing a lot of heavy graphics work with this character,comic covers and stuff (and haven't yet) I wanted to keep Kickasses color green instead of red so it was easier to do graphics. So I changed him to green or Emerald.

Then I punched info into a superhero name generator and went through a ton of names before settling on Assassin, because it's generic and subtly is lost on these kids.

It will be the Emerald weapon only when Kash defeats him in a 3 stages of hell match to decide the name ;D

[Tommy Knox]

My comment was Final Fantasy 7 related. Lol

[warrenpeace]

Jun 5, 2013 19:18:27 GMT -4 Tommy Knox said:

My comment was Final Fantasy 7 related. Lol

Oh lol. though 7 was my favorite to play, it's been so long since I even owned a gaming console to even get a video game reference.

[Tommy Knox]

Haha, it's all good. I thought kicking that Mack trucks ass made you cool in my book but this just took you to higher levels.