RP Feedback if possible.

[Rick Stevens]

If at all possible i would like some feedback for my RP "Trapped" this week. It is my first what i would consider "real" role play in i believe a year, and by "real" i mean i actually put effort into it and it took me more than 10 minutes to write. I am still working off some rust obviously after being out of the E-fedding game for so long so some constructive criticism would be greatly appreciated.

["The Hottest Shit Going"]

First I'm a Mr. Perfect mark, and love that you are using his pic base. Second, the roleplay was humorous and kept my attention all the way through. I think it was wel done, and would get my vote as a good effort. I think you are going to be a great fit for our crew of fuck offs, shit talkers, and ball busters. Can't wait to tangle with you some time, would be fun. I love that kind of RP'r, and is one thing I miss about Justin Job, he was hillarious.

In character- My lawyers will be watching you closely...the Woman Hater is trademarked, and copyrighted in my name...thats right the JESUS.

[Link]

Very interesting. I wasn't feeling it at first with the whole neighbors and trash can situation but I think I needed to get used to your style and humor as it slowly began feeling like a "Naked Gun" or "Airplane" type movie. The world you live in allows you to do these ridiculous things, like kick your wife in the chest and have her get up like it didn't even really hurt. I laughed out loud, I'm not going to lie...good job. I look forward to reading more of your work.

[Twister]

I also enjoyed it, cant really add much to what the others said - yet - but will if it comes to me.